So here’s the first YESTERDAY section. There were two really big changes to this. The first was simply that I rewrote a lot of crap because I did more telling than showing, and I’m not sure I still didn’t tell too much. But part of the fun of this exercise is producing work consistently on a deadline. It’s a little like NaNoWriMo but all year long. And seriously, I only just finished editing this chapter at 6:50pm the DAY BEFORE I planned on releasing it.
The other change I made was pretty major. Originally, I’d intended for Charlie and Theo to fall in love over the course of the YESTERDAY sections, but I was driving to work this morning (yes, as in I made this decision today), and I realized something I’m not going to reveal until later. But I also realized that if I get to the end of this chapter, and show that Charlie and Theo are already in love and together…sort of…it really throws a lot of questions into the air. Why does Charlie call him names? Why did Theo head to New York? Why does Charlie deny knowing Theo in the first TODAY section? That was the kind of tension I was looking for, and I hope that the decision to radically speed up my time-line won’t end up biting me in the ass later on.
There weren’t as many comments on this section, just a lot of deletes and rewrites.